Just something I had a sudden spark to write, wanted to get peoples opinions on it. Not thought of a title for it or anything, but if I am to writer any more of it, this would probably be the prologue. So yeah... without further ado here is my little 1 page prologue to a non-existant story (It is a page long btw)



Story is in blue, that's all I have so far. If anyones got any ideas, criticism, help, corrections... whatever to help either spur me into writing more or just improving what I have here that would be awsome!

Thanks alot guys and gals, hopefully I can keep this going and eventually I'll have my very own story all nicely written up on here and saved in my laptop
Oli

Not anything against your story but vampires is getting old now. Make up your own monster or fins another blood feeding creature. thats my opinion anyway.

It's good. someone has been reading too many Darren Shan novels. lol. xD The best story's in novels are usually those which have been stolen and adapted from other novels or from an experience of the authors which has been exaggerated and turned into an extreme fictional story. Well that is what my English teacher says lol. Good start. As for idea's on where to go next, there are not too many options to be honest that haven't already been explored by other authors regarding the vampire storyline. The fighting and reluctance to the feeding on humans is where i see yours going tbh.

eskimo wrote:


Never heard of Darren Shan so wouldn't know anything to steal from him
I'm thinking along the lines of there being some sort of 'cure' for the hole vampire thing, make it more like a curse than a permanant change. Of course if I do go along those lines, the main character doesn't know of it being that yet, so it'll be interesting to see what I can come up with as to him finding it all out and deciding if he wants to be human again or not

Again, no idea if that's been thought up yet either, but it's something that I just had an urge to do, so if it's been used or not, will not matter to me